Just a few notes, due the the monthly/weekly contest, you will earn $250 off the demo alone. What I think you should do, is post the full version on Kongregate, which might win you the top monthly prize, as should of a thank you to Kongregate.
Taking out the story, adding in a new background and a hat does not make a new game, if you are going to change the game, do it to the first one, don't post it as another game
I think you should be able to use money you have in the bank, as well as have how much money you have in the bank beside the money you have outside of the bank. Only have bank a different color, like yellow
I found a bug, when you have a magnet you will still slide on cake, but your animation doesn't change so it looks like your just walking with a magnet when you slide
As much as I like this game, I would rather have more then one track to listen to while I play. Its not really a short game and the music gets stale really quick.
First off, this doesn't look like your game. For one thing you didn't even get the name right. There is no mention of your name in it or anything. And it has much better grammar then you have.