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So I got a 16/25 (64%) on a poem in english

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The fuck.

1: It was a goddamn sonnet. A SONNET
2: It had many breaking bad references in it
3: All the kids who followed the example blindy and had shit like

“I am a football player, I am a chef, I am a videogame player”

Got 25/25

4: I got a 3/5 when it came to word choice. I can’t figure out one word in there a 10th grader wouldn’t know.

The poem:

I am what I am and I’ll always be me
I’m coca-cola opposed to store brand pop
Ship to over 200 countries over the sea
As long as the soda keeps selling this train doesn’t stop

I’m the best brand and my sales are peaking
Store brands all have a substandard cook
I’m the purest and not just chemically speaking
Biggest soda company, just look at my account book

I am what I am and I’ll always be myself.
A world without coca-cola shares
Would be one that is all by itself
A world without coca-cola wares

Coca-cola selling by the pound
Coca-cola is the best soda around

also it sounds funny because it is funny. 3/4ths of it is a breaking bad reference

 
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hidin’ OP and inb4MFThomas

lockblock: discuss bullshit grades

 
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Originally posted by YoLoSwAg_420:

maybe next time you don’t use references to some random show that not everyone will get

because it’s better if your poem, you know, makes sense

Mft you don’t even need to know the references to see it’s a perfect 25/25.

Not only did I redesign the entire concept of the poem, I made it into a goddamn sonnet.

It was the first assignment of the year. She said the bar was set extremely low.

 
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For someone like me, who has never seen breaking bad, your poem makes no sense. That’s probably why you got such a low grade.

 
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Originally posted by pink_princess:

For someone like me, who has never seen breaking bad, your poem makes no sense. That’s probably why you got such a low grade.

It was supposed to be a poem about myself.

However I don’t wish to divulge information about myself to my teacher or my class.

 
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The teacher likes Pepsi more

 
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Originally posted by YoLoSwAg_420:

but like I and the above poster said, it makes no sense

It shouldn’t need to.

1: it’s a sonnet
2: it’s a metaphoric poem, it makes whatever sense you give it
3: it’s a fucking sonnet on a 10th grade poem that people did absolute shit on and got 25/25

 
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Originally posted by YoLoSwAg_420:

so basically you think you should get a better grade because you know how to count

No, I think I should get a better grade because I deserve one.

 
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Originally posted by YoLoSwAg_420:

i don’t think you do and i’ll leave it at that
bye

Let’s agree to disagree comrade.

 
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She obviously didn’t get it, like everyone else on the face of the earth. Sweet jesus, I didn’t even know they still played that show.

 
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I am what I am and I’ll always be me
I’m coca-cola

bang
theres the problem
i dotn think she gave you such a grade because you did bad
but maybe some thickly-veiled way to tell you to believe in yourself and not compare yourself to a terrible soda brand and essentially saying that you are shit

 
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Just follow guidelines when it comes to stupid poetry assignments in high school.

Don’t get me wrong; I love writing poetry. I do it in my spare time for fun. What I don’t like is writing poetry with guidelines. When you don’t have total control over what your poem is about, don’t try to go above and beyond to impress your teacher when you can turn in garbage and receive a perfect score.

 
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I love writing poetry.

ha
whadda nerdoqueen
i bet you love writing all those unrequited love sonnets to all the pretty ladies you see walking down the street too huh
dork
loser

 
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Originally posted by ritzfitz91:

I love writing poetry.

ha
whadda nerdoqueen
i bet you love writing all those unrequited love sonnets to all the pretty ladies you see walking down the street too huh
dork
loser

Nah, my poetry is usually pretty dark, sometimes to the point where I don’t share it with anybody.

 
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sounds pretty edgy
is there any CRAWLING or NUMB in it

 
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Nope. My writing style is heavily-influenced by Lovecraft and Poe. Those two make Linkin Park lyrics look like a third grader wrote them.

 
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I think you deserved the bad grade… I didn’t like the poem that muh.

 
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Write like a normal person. Then you’ll get an A like those football players.

 
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Originally posted by superfastjelly:

The teacher likes Pepsi more

 
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ITT: Some guy complaining he got a bad grade because the teacher didn’t understand the poem he wrote…because:

Originally posted by FullMeasureZam:
2: it’s a metaphoric poem, it makes whatever sense you give it

 
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also it sounds funny because it is funny.

What? No. It wasn’t funny at all. Maybe that’s why you got such a bad grade.

 
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Welcome to the American system of education. You either do things just as you are told (which is what being “creative” means there) or you go to a mental hospital as a potential terrorist. If you don’t live in US/Canada, don’t worry! The reach of this system is not limited to those countries.

Hilarious poem, by the way.

 
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Maybe you shouldn’t use Breaking Bad references on someone who hasn’t seen Breaking Bad.
Also, you were talking about Coca-Cola the entire time.

 
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I’m in the coca-cola business.

 
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Originally posted by FullMeasureZam:
Originally posted by pink_princess:

For someone like me, who has never seen breaking bad, your poem makes no sense. That’s probably why you got such a low grade.

It was supposed to be a poem about myself.

However I don’t wish to divulge information about myself to my teacher or my class.

I would guess that could be the problem. A poem that’s supposed to be about yourself but that’s not really about yourself doesn’t meet the requirements.