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Hello everybody. Today, I have decided to write a fanfiction. Mainly 2 reasons. One, I suck at Elements. Two, I am very creative. Writing an Elements fanfiction is easier than getting 100k score right? Well, maybe in my opinion, but lets get started!

CHARACTER SUGGESTIONS
If you read this story, you find it epic, but you’re like “Why isn’t there a character with this personality?! I want him in the story!” The solution is here.

If you would like to give a character suggestion, just post it in this forum thread. Others will vote whether or not your character deserves to be in the story. Here’s the format:

EXAMPLE CHARACTER

Name: DaHumanitarian
Race: Alien
Gender: Unknown
Special Traits: Has a laser gun (didn’t know what to put here, basically here you list your characters height, weight, anything that sets him apart from others e.g. scar on forehead. Or you may want to put something like mother died at birth, etc.)
Age: -1
Hometown: Kongregate

ALRIGHT, lets dive into the story! (Well, in the next post)

 
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CHAPTER 1
It was a dark and stormy night. Hamish, along with his pet bird, had finally travelled to Bassalt City, a city famous for its Elemental Arenas and it’s various schools to train young aspiring Elementalists (people that use pets or animals to fight), Magicians (those that use magic) and Sages (those that use weapons). Hamish had come from a poor family. His father was a peasant and his mother was a farmer. Although he had very little money and food along with him, Hamish had 1 special ability – He was proficient at taming wild animals. Rusty, his pet bird, was tamed by him on the way to Bassalt City.

Hamish’s tummy was killing him. It was time to find something to eat.

He rushed into the nearby tavern as it was raining. Also because his tummy was being an ass.

“Hello!” the bartender said. “Come in!”
Hamish walked through a bunch of people and sat at one of the bar seats.
“So, what would you like to drink? We also have our speciality roasted phoenix wings!”
“Umm…” Hamish began. “I don’t have much money on me… is there anything here I can buy for 5 electrum or less?”
“Oh yes!” The bartender said, “If you don’t have much money, you can pay at the end of the month. It’s sort of like a… tab. But if you don’t pay in time then the police will come after you.”
“Umm… okay… I guess. I would like the… steamed vegtables with chicken meat.”
“Alright! That’s 10 electrum on your tab. I shall go cook your meal.”

10 MINUTES LATER

“Whoa!” Hamish said in shock. “All of this, for me? That’s some really nice food you got there! Thanks again, old man!”
“No problem. Just remember to pay at the end of the month. Also, could you keep your bird outside? It’s starting to annoy some of the customers.”
“Hey old man,” A muscular man said, “could I have another beer?”
“No. You’re drunk.” said the bartender. “Go home and rest. You can come back tomorrow.”
HUH? WHAT WAS THAT? GIMME ANOTHER DRINK.”

The muscular man grabbed the bartender by the neck and lifted him up into the air. Some of the people in the bar got scared and ran outside.

“Hey you! Cut it out!” A girl said. She was around Hamish’s age, about 16 or 17.
“Oh, so what’s a little girl going to do to me, huh?”
The man let go of the bartender, which by now was unconcious due to suffocation. Hamish just watched in shock, but when he heard the thud of the bartender hitting the ground, it sparked him into action.
“Hey you! The girl over there! It’s dangerous! Get out of here!”
“Huh?” the girl replied back. “I can handle myself.”

She took out what looked like a deck holder and opened it. She drew one card out.

She started chanting some magical words. “I call upon the power of Water! Freeze thy foe who chooses to wreck havoc!”
A magical symbol was drawn in front of her. It resembled a water droplet.

Slowly, the man’s feet were frozen. The ice was climbing up his body slowly and finally reached his neck.

“You… You’ll regret this…”
She put back the card into her deck holder. Apparently, she was a very powerful magician.

“Whoa…” Hamish started. He then paused for a moment on whether to ask her on where she got her powers, or what her name was.

A) Ask her name.
B) Ask where she got her power from.
C) Ask both.
D) Don’t ask her anything.

CURRENT CHARACTERS

Hamish: (Items) None (Spells) None (Weapons) None (Pet) Rusty the Bird

Cash on hand: 5 electrum

 
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I always been waiting to see who would step up and create their own fanfic. Such a refreshing story, I like it. For my choice I pick C) Ask both.

 
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I love writing, so you can count on me for ideas or questions. I think a better question would be: “Wh…who are you?” And also, too bad you made the character a girl, or else it could be me, Frost =P And I supose since I am suggesting a character, here is the bio:

Name: Frost
Race: Human
Gender: Male
Special traits: Bright blonde hair with shocking icy blue eyes. Medium height, normal weight, carries a katana as a weapon.
Age: 17

 
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I’m sorry, but what? Age is negative one?

 
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Oh wow. My brother is writing a story. Cuking fopycat. Anyways, I pick C.

 
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Originally posted by Frost1076:

I love writing, so you can count on me for ideas or questions. I think a better question would be: “Wh…who are you?” And also, too bad you made the character a girl, or else it could be me, Frost =P And I supose since I am suggesting a character, here is the bio:

Name: Frost
Race: Human
Gender: Male
Special traits: Bright blonde hair with shocking icy blue eyes. Medium height, normal weight, carries a katana as a weapon.
Age: 17

I would prefer somebody named something normal, as SPOILER ALERT

After awhile in the story, they will need stage names to participate in the Elemental Tournament. Sorta of like Avatar: The Legend Of Korra, except that opponents can be killed and such. Hunger Games, except that you volunteer to participate and you gets loads of munnies if you win. I like munnies.

Originally posted by furballdn:

I’m sorry, but what? Age is negative one?

Set your birthdate to December 30th and put your birth year as 2012. I did it on enjin, though I don’t know if you can change your age on Kongregate. Next chapter is in the next post :D. A lot of these ideas I got from DevinSmiles, the creator of “The 7 Gems” fanfic. Yes, we are actually classmates.

And noobgai, I am not your brother, what are you talking about? I am definitely not your brother. ._.

 
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Ermahgerd. I posted, saw a mistake, went to edit, and now the whole chapter is lost. DAMNIT.

 
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Cool story bro. I like the arena idea and hope to have even just a small part in it.

Name: Sorfimmer (or if that’s too weird do Graham)
race: Human
Gender: male
Special traits: Air elemental, 5’10’’, black hair, brown skin (like korra) but dark brown eyes. Very agile. Wields eagle’s eye (or the bow).
Personality: Not much, but merciless when it comes to killing, and Tries to remain invisible in combat.
Age: 17

 
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Originally posted by sorfimmer:

Cool story bro. I like the arena idea and hope to have even just a small part in it.

Name: Sorfimmer (or if that’s too weird do Graham)
race: Human
Gender: male
Special traits: Air elemental, 5’10’’, black hair, brown skin (like korra) but dark brown eyes. Very agile. Wields eagle’s eye (or the bow).
Personality: Not much, but merciless when it comes to killing, and Tries to remain invisible in combat.
Age: 17

So basically, a sage that wields Eagle’s Eye. In my story, SPOILER ALERT

The 12 rare weapons are legendary weapons. Thus, they have been sealed up in a mountain far away from Basalt city. The crew (Which includes Hamish, the girl (Justine) and another Sage) have to go to the mountain to save the world from the FGs.

Nice. Accepted Graham, will be the Sage of team Vaughan (Hamish’s surname). Wields a bow called Airblast.

 
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I will write after I get over my Elements addiction. Must. Get. Poison Dials SoSac!

 
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Picked option C) Ask both.

CHAPTER 1 PART 2

“So… Umm… Who are you?”
“My name is Justine. Justine Saffron.”
“Whoa, sweet name. Anyway, where did you get your powers?”
“I’m a trainee Magician at Vaughan Elementalist academy.”
“Wait, Vaughan? That’s my surname!”
“Huh? What is your name?”
“Hamish Vaughan.”
“…That’s the name of our king. What is your REAL name?”
“I already told you! Hamish Vaughan!”
An awkward silence fell upon them.
“Hamish Vaughan is our king’s name. Vaughan is a surname of those who have royal blood… who exactly are you?”
“Umm… I’m a traveller from the water village Aquatis.”
“Huh… so he’s a nobody…” Justine muttered.
“Well, it might just be a coincidence that your name matches the king’s perfectly, but how’d you get that surname?”
“Well, my full name is Hamish Vaughan Jr.”
“…I don’t know.”
“Know what?”
“You might be the king’s son and just tricking me.”
“No, I’m not, and I need to find a job. I’ve travelled 29 hard days just to reach this city.”
“Looking for a job I see!” the bartender suddenly woke up.
“What? I thought you were unconscious!” Justine and Hamish said at the same time.
They looked at each other then turned away, both of them blushing.
The bartender slowly stood up.
“I need an assistant,” he started. “being a one man chef and the only bartender as well is really hard. I’m in dire need of help.”
“Umm, how much does it pay?”
“0.”
“Why zero?”
“Because you scared away all the customers damnit! All of them haven’t even paid yet, and they were already finishing their meals!”
“Oh. Sorry.”
“And if you don’t work for me, I’ll call the damn police on ya! Not to mention the 10 electrum you owe me!”
“Whoa sir… calm down.”
CALM DOWN?! YOU OWE ME A TOTAL OF 580 ELECTRUM! THAT WAS THE COST OF PREPARING ALL THE DAMNED MEALS!”
“Okay, okay, I’ll work for you.”
“Good!” the bartender suddenly had a moodswing and changed from angry to happy.
“Anyway, about you… Since you are a traveller, you can live in my appartment. Whadd’ya say?”
“Sure, why not?”
“Also, you can enroll in my school. I’ll pay for your fees.”
“And why are you doing something like that?”
“Umm…” She started blushing. Obviously something weird was going on.
“Anyways,” the bartender interrupted, “your work starts tomorrow.”
“Er, yes sir?”

After a bunch of signing, Hamish became a slave. Sort of. He wasn’t paid and he was forced into his ‘job’ (which doesn’t even pay). After leaving the tavern, Hamish, Rusty and Justine walked towards what is now their home.

“Um, Hamish?”
“Yes?”
“If you’re gonna enroll in my school, you’ll need to pick one fighting style.”
“Umm… okay?”
“You see, our school isn’t a normal one. It’s about training fighting techniques to nurture every pupil into a true Elementalist… my dream is to become the Elemental Master.”
“The Elemental Master?”
“The best Elementalist in the world… (Naruto reference. Don’t look.)”
“And why such a dream? You’re a girl aren’t you? Girls aren’t meant to fight.”
“Look, I can defend myself, okay?! I’m not a defenseless girl like you think.”
“Okay, sorry, geez.”
“So back to the subject, are you going to become an Elementalist, Sage or Magician?”
“Umm… What?”
“Like, your fighting style.”
“What were they again?”
“Elementalists, Sages, or Magicians.”
“Can you explain to me what each fighting style contains?”
“An Elementalist, uses pets to fight. They don’t need to be very agile or strong, as their pets will do the job. They are very charismatic and natural leaders. Magicians use Spells to attack from afar. They are very agile and can dodge attacks. Normally, Magicians specialize in one type of Element. For me, I specialize in Water. Magicians are normally cheerful and happy most of the time, and can have moodswings easily.”
“That explains the shouting…” Hamish muttered.
“Sages. They use weapons imbued with magical properties. They are the fastest out of the three main fighting types, and are normally secluded or quiet people. However, I know a person named Graham, which apparently, is the total opposite.”
“Okay, umm… I’ll become a-”

A) Elementalist
B) Magician
C) Sage
D) Wait a second, this sounds stupid.

Characters

Hamish & Justine

(Items: None)(Spells: Fire Lance, Congeal, Heal)(Pets: Rusty the Bird)(Weapons: None)

Cash on Hand: 605 electrum

 
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Usually when i do feedback for stuff like this it’s just grammar corrections and whatnot, but so far what i’m seeing’s quite good. On the first line of chap 1 you wrote finally travelled to Bassalt, I think that saying finally arrived at Bassalt would sound and flow better , ^^. As for the continuation of your story (considering what you wrote earlier) i’d say A) Elementalist.

 
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Originally posted by DaHumanitarian:
Originally posted by Frost1076:

I love writing, so you can count on me for ideas or questions. I think a better question would be: “Wh…who are you?” And also, too bad you made the character a girl, or else it could be me, Frost =P And I supose since I am suggesting a character, here is the bio:

Name: Frost
Race: Human
Gender: Male
Special traits: Bright blonde hair with shocking icy blue eyes. Medium height, normal weight, carries a katana as a weapon.
Age: 17

I would prefer somebody named something normal, as SPOILER ALERT

Well, his name is Zyroc, but his nickname is Frost. He would kind of be a magician, except he uses a weapon for backup.

And, given the character, I think hamish would do best as an Elementalist, given that he already has a pet of his own.

 
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Hmm, Zyroc is accepted. Although I’ll find some use for him later in the story. Maybe he could be an enemy of the team at first, (arena competitors), then join up for some epic adventure? I like that.

Also, when another person votes, I shall write. Either that or nobody reads in the next 4 hours.

EDIT Screw dat sheet, Imma write anywayz. Next post.

 
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CHAPTER 1 PART 3

“Elementalist. Yeah. That sounds cool.”
“Awesome choice. Although all 3 choices are awesome. Tell me, who’s that bird that’s following you around?”
Rusty started squawking as if it were angry. Hamish put his hand out and Rusty perched on it.
“This guy is one real bugger. He eats more food than I do!” Hamish joked.
Rusty didn’t seem happy about it. It pecked Hamish’s hand.
“Ow! Geez, sorry. Anyway, I found him while travelling here. It was a sick and injured lil’ fellow so I decided to treat it back to health. Then it started following me around.”
“Oh, cool. Seems like you already have partner! That’s awesome.”
“What? A partner?”
“A partner is a pet. Basically, the main pet that you use. Partners do not need to be stored in cards.”
“Wait, card storage?”
“You see,” Justine began. She pulled out her Congeal spell card. “This is spell essence.”
She waved her hands above the card in a pulling motion, as if controlling the waves. A bright, blue orb was slowly pulled out of the card. The images on the card started disappearing.
“Whoa! What’s that do?”
“Well basically, this is what fuels my magic powers. I can’t freeze a person out of nowhere, the power all comes from spell essence.”
“Cool! Awesome!”
She imbued the card with the spell essence. The images on the card came back.
“However, different elements have different kinds of spell essence. For example, a fire card, such as fire lance, contains a different kind of spell essence.”
She pulled the spell essence out of the card. Instead of a bright blue, it was a bright red, and hot to the touch. It resembled a flame, whereas the water spell essence resembled ice. It reminded Hamish of rage.
“Okay, I get it.”
“Good! Now, about creatures. When you tame a creature, it can’t always follow you around. It will disturb others. Especially when your pet is huge and gigantic, or really scary. That’s why cards are useful.”
She took out a blank card.
“Here, try imbuing this card with Rusty’s soul.”
“Umm, how exactly do I do that?”
“Connect your mind with your pet, then try to ask it to go into the card.”
She passed him a mindgate.
“Use this.”
“Okay.” he held the mindgate in front of his head. His vision started blurring and his eyes closed.
It was dark. As if he was sleeping. Then his eyes opened. A young boy appeared.
“Who… who are you?”
“Don’t you recognize me? I’m Rusty, your partner. And I don’t want to go in there. Please help me, Hamish!”
“Sorry, but you have to.”
“Fine… but only if you’ll feed me REAL meat later. I hate corn.”
“Alright.”

Then, his vision went blank. His eyes opened again, and he saw everything from before. It was as if he froze time. When he gazed at the blank card, a picture of Rusty was imbued in it.

“Wait a sec, where’s that little bugger?”
“He’s in that card, silly!” Justine chuckled.
“Oh. Alright.”
“Now try summoning him!”
“How?”
“Just raise the card in front of your face and think as if you were calling Rusty. Think of you telling him to come to your aid.”
“Alright…”

Hamish raised the card in front of his face, and turned it so that the image would be facing the other way. He closed his eyes and called for Rusty in his mind.

He felt that the card was being torn apart, and that it was being levitated into the air. The shredded pieces of the card combined into Rusty, and he was holding a blank card in his beak.

“Whoa… this is gonna be so cool!”
“I know right!”
“But first, I want to sleep. It’s 1 a.m.”

After 10 minutes of walking and chatting, they had arrived at Justine’s house.

“Alright! So this is my apartment.”
She unlocked the door and swung it open.
Inside was a tidy, neat, clean and spacious house. Hamish took a while to make himself comfortable.
“Yeah! But I’m sleepy. Where can I sleep?”
“Uh, here’s the problem… there’s only one queen sized bed and the couch.”
“…So, you invited me to your home knowing that?”
“Erm… yes?”
“WHY’D YOU DO THAT?!”
“Well, otherwise you’d have nowhere else to stay.”
“True, but you want me to SLEEP with you? I just met you!”
“Remember, there’s the couch option.”
“Right.”

A) Couch
B) Bed
C) Gtfo here. Shez a slut.

Characters

Hamish & Justine

(Items: None)(Spells: Fire Lance, Congeal, Heal)(Pets: Rusty the Bird)(Weapons: None)

Cash on Hand: 605 electrum

 
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This story is gonna take a while to develop. What I plan is for chapter 2 to be when they finally participate in the arena. SPOILERS

Basically, to make Hamish seem like a real person, there are going to be 2 girls – Justine and another. That way, he’d be stuck choosing which one to love while juggling his slavery, arena, and schooling. Maybe instaed of all fighting, this fanfic could also be about life. Except that it’s funny.

WHATEVER YOU DO, DON’T PICK BED. PLEASE DON’T PICK BED. I SERIOUSLY MEAN IT. DO NOT PICK BED! EVER! That sentence, as well as this one, is not reverse psychology. The not is not reverse psychology.

That was definitely NOT sarcasm.

 
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Lol, couch is the only logical answer, given the characters personalities, from what I can see.

 
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indeed, plus i’d prefer a cleaner story :P if i want porn it can be found in easier locations >.<
couch for sure

 
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XD. If you pick bed they wont be sleeping in the same bed. If you pick bed, Hamish would be like “Can you just sleep on the couch? I mean, I don’t want to be in the same bed as you.” :P

 
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“So, the couch, or the bed, hmm.”
“You can pick whichever, It doesn’t matter to me. I could always sleep on the couch…”
“Nonono, it’s fine. I’m lucky enough to have a roof over my head, and the couch is a lot nicer then where I’ve slept the last few days.”
“All right, great! I’ll go get some blankets.” Justine leaves to get some blankets. Hamish scans the room, taking in the small but functional room.
“Here we go…” Hamish turned back towards Justine, who was carrying a couple blankets. “Hope this will do.”
“That’s great! I hope you have a good sleep too.”
“Okay. I’ll see you tomorrow.”
Hamish took the blanket and unfolded it, wrapping himself in warm comfort. It was the first time he had ever slept in luxury. Well, sort of. But it would’ve been more comfortable in the bed. Hamish thought about the events of the day. He was pretty lucky to have gotten such a friend. But now, it was time to sleep. Rusty the Rascal was stored into his card form and placed on the table.
He closed his eyes, and not even after five minutes he was already asleep.

“Die.”
“No! Hamish! Help!”
“Not in your dreams.”
“No… no… AH!”
“HOLY SHIT! WHAT THE HELL IS HAPPENING?!”
Hamish opened his eyes. He awoke in a burning place. Apparently, these were the remains of Basalt City. He saw Justine lying on the floor, motionless. Half of her body was burned and turned into a blackish color. Standing above her was a man in a hood. His arms were wrapped in flames.
“Oh, so you’re her boyfriend, eh?” the man began. “I am Pyrotis, one of the Half-Bloods. This city has angered us by their… so called contraptions.”
“AND HOW DOES THAT GIVE YOU PERMISSION TO TAKE SO MANY LIVES?!” Hamish shouted in anger. “WHAT THE HELL HAVE WE DONE?”
“You.. you… You will die!” Hamish started tearing. He stood up and charged at the man in the hood at full force. He threw a punch at the figures head. Pyrotis caught the punch with his hand, and lifted Ham into the air with minimal effort and chuckled.
“Weak. I’d thought you’d be much more of a challenge, ‘Golden Rookie’.” Pyrotis raised his other hand. A hot flame started forming in his palm. “I have no use for such weaklings. You shall go to hell!!” Pyrotis swung his hand towards hams face.
“Ow!”
Hamish woke up, this time for real. Apparently, it was a dream. He was lying on the floor.
He looked at the window and saw that it was already sunrise. Probably about 7 or 8 in the morning.
At the same time, Justine had woke up. It was time for school.
“Yo, Hamish!”
“Hi.”
“Wow, you look like you got an electric shock or something! Your hair is standing up!”
“It is?” he ran to the bathroom and looked into the mirror. His hair was standing up, just like what Justine had told him.
“Teeheehee…” Justine giggled.
Feeling embarrassed, Hamish grabbed the nearest brush and started combing his hair.
“That’s a girl’s brush, silly! Use this comb!”
Justine hands him a comb. For some reason, this reminds him of a weapon.
“Take good care of it!”
“Yeah, I will.” He rapidly combed his hair until it was neatly flattened.
“Hey, school starts at 10. Last night, I couldn’t sleep. I had a bad dream where a half-blood destroyed the city and then killed you.”
“Hey, me too! Except that you were the one killed. What a coincidence.”
“Funny, how can I think such things? Basalt city is home to the elite Elementalist Counter Terrorist Force, or ECTF for short. They are really powerful and consist of many strong Elementalists, Sages and Magicians. Some of them are even arena champions!”
“Wow, maybe I can get a job there. Anyway, what is this ‘arena’ you speak of?”
“Oh, you don’t know?”
“That seems to be the case.”
“Well, the arena is one of the most popular and exciting things here at Basalt city. A normal match consists of either 1 on 1 battles or 3 on 3 team battles. Last year, when I participated in 1 on 1, I didn’t even manage to get past the preliminaries!”
“But you’re so strong! How is that even possible?”
“Well, that’s how difficult the arena is.”
Both of them ate a scrumptious breakfast that was cooked by Justine. After brushing her teeth, Justine remembered something important.
“My uncle is the principal of the school, Hamish.”
“Huh? Your uncle? Who’s he?”
“His name is Pyrotis Kerrigan.”
Wait, Pyrotis? Like the guy in my dream?
“Uh-huh. So basically that means I am 100% confirmed to get a slot in the school?”
“Yeah.”
“Wow. You should’ve told me earlier.”
“Sorry, I was having a lot of fun talking to you that I forgot. Hehe…”
“Okay, it’s 9:30 already. We should be leaving.”
“Yes, we should.”
30 MINUTES LATER.
“Hurry up Hamish! The bell has already rung!”
“Okay, okay! Geez. Just slow down a little.”
They both entered the school grounds. The entire campus was filled with students. Chatting, sparring, and showing off their cards. The duo made their way to the principal’s office, to make Hamish become an official student.
“Hey Uncle Kerrigan!”
“Justine! Great to see you. But haven’t I already taught you how to knock?”
They both hugged each other.
“Who is this handsome young man over here? Your boyfriend, I suppose?”
“No, uncle, this person is Hamish. Hamish, meet Pyrotis Kerrigan, or principal Kerrigan, if you will.”
“Good morning, sir.”
“Hah! No need to be so formal with me. I’m guessing you want to be a student?”
“Yes, indeed I do, sir.”
“Well, are you an Elementalist, Sage, or-“
“Elementalist.”
Pyrotis opens his drawers, takes out a sheet of paper, a badge, and set of Kerrigan Elementalist school clothes.
“Here, sign this, and write a cheque payable to Kerrigan Elementalist. Amount, 1500 Electrum as a sign up fee, and 300 per month.”
“Wait a second, I have to pay?”
“This ain’t a free country, son.” Pyrotis bursts out in laughter.
“Err, uncle, you see, this man is a traveller, so he doesn’t have much money on him. For now, I will cover his expenses.” Justine proceeds to take out her purse.
“W-wait! I’ll pay! Just not now. Let me find a job.”
“Sure. Just make sure you pay me.”
“Yes sir…” he sighed. He was getting into another debt.
“Okay, your class is 2-B. Same as Justine. I hope you two younglings have fun.”
“We will, uncle. Take care!”
LATER, WHILE WALKING TO 2-B
“You know, I could’ve paid for you.”
“I know… but it just doesn’t feel right. You’re helping so much and I’m not doing a single thing to repay you back… it makes me feel… guilty.”
“Well, don’t worry about it. My uncle is a noble.”
“Yeah, I know that, he has a lot of money and stuff. But that’s not the point.”
“Well, the point is we’re late for class, and Mrs Starbright hates late students.”
“Right…”
END OF CHAPTER 1

 
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Seems good. Perhaps for the classes, the students are all given starter cards, like a sage would probably get a few self boosting cards like blessing and momentum, an elementalist would get a few basic monsters, like horned frog and firefly, and a magician would get firebolt and congeal.

 
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Apparently, Frost is the only one that actually READS my story. No chapters until at least 2 people respond.

 
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maybe for the first class, he gets pissed off at some one or something like that. ill think of a character for that, if u accept my idea, but i just read the chapter. should i suggest a completly evil person or a half good half bad sorta guy?

EDIT: nvm got a character.
Name: Shaer (i want him to be foreign u can change if u want)
Race: Human (What types of races are u accepting?)
Gender:Male
Class: I dont care. well technically, i cant choose. Magician, fire or Sage, double axes could be special in some way dont know.
Special traits: taller than hamish by 3 inches. has a burn scar on hand if fire mage or has cut on shoulder if sage. phisically fit, more on the muscelly side. his village got raided and everyone died. gets angry easily.
Age: same age as hamish.
if u hate, dont yell at me. i try my best.
anyways, good luck! this has a lot of potential!

 
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Originally posted by imalegioner:

maybe for the first class, he gets pissed off at some one or something like that. ill think of a character for that, if u accept my idea, but i just read the chapter. should i suggest a completly evil person or a half good half bad sorta guy?

EDIT: nvm got a character.
Name: Shaer (i want him to be foreign u can change if u want)
Race: Human (What types of races are u accepting?)
Gender:Male
Class: I dont care. well technically, i cant choose. Magician, fire or Sage, double axes could be special in some way dont know.
Special traits: taller than hamish by 3 inches. has a burn scar on hand if fire mage or has cut on shoulder if sage. phisically fit, more on the muscelly side. his village got raided and everyone died. gets angry easily.
Age: same age as hamish.
if u hate, dont yell at me. i try my best.
anyways, good luck! this has a lot of potential!

Bleh, I don’t know. There are enough characters already, so I won’t be accepting more. Maybe later in the story. Also, I don’t take help for storyline, 1. Mainly because I have enough ideas, and 2. Frost is already helping me.