Need help with english grammer! =)

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ok, i sucks with english grammer! (fortunately, it’s not my first language=)

And so my first game “MrGarden” has some ugly english grammer… (http://www.kongregate.com/games/Yespunk/mrgarden)

Can someone help me to correct this? i would be very grateful (and people also i guess as they won’t pass out again reading my texts=)!

Here’re the sentences:

- Hello, welcome in my flower shop!

- My flowers grown unless they are cut and alternate color at each growth.

- your goal is to cut in the order the 3 flowers i ask for

- You cuts flowers from my garden, with the left mouse button

- Do it before i gets impatient and angry, otherwise it’s game over…

- OH! This line is gilded because we cut the third flower in it!

- That’s very usefull! If you cut the last flower, five new flowers will grown!

- A council… try to turn all my garden gilded, you’ll be surprised

- And now the most important

- When you cuts quickly the 3 requested flowers, you light a yellow dot in the bottom

- When the 3 yellow dots are lit, a brilliant seed grown in my garden. Cut it!

- Use a brilliant seed when you doesn’t find a bouquet’s flower in the garden!

- Well, that’s all for now. Come on, it’s time to open the shop…

 
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Hello, welcome to my flower shop!

My flowers grow unless they are cut, and change colour each growth.

Your goal is to cut the 3 flowers in the order I ask.

You cut flowers in my garden with the left mouse button.

Do it before I get impatient and angry, or it’s game over…

OH! This line is gilded becuase we cut the third flower in it (nothing to change in this sentence, but then again, i’m not sure what ‘gilded’ means)

That’s very useful! When you cut the last flower, five new flowers will grow!

A council… try to gild(?) all my garden, you’ll be surprised.

And now, the most important.

When you cut the 3 requested flowers quickly, a yellow dot at the bottom will light.

When 3 yellow dots are lit, a brilliant seed will grow in my garden. Cut it!

Use a brilliant seed when you can’t find the bouqet’s correct flower in the garden!

Well, that’s all for now. Come on, it’s time to open the shop…

 
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Many thanks Editundo! I’ll upload a new version of MrGarden soon with the correct grammer.
i guess is should replace gilded by lighted, it’ll probably make more sense for everyone.
Peace.

 
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Use lit instead of lighted. Also, bright might be closer to gild in meaning (unless you meant to turn gold in color). You could use: “A council… try to brighten (light up) all my garden – you’ll be surprised.” and “This line is bright (lit) because we’ve cut the third flower in (on) it.” [alternatives in parenthesis]

 
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why do people use U in the word color….

 
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why do people use U in the word color….


It’s the British spelling. A lot of words with just “o” in American English will have “ou” in the British version. Some words with a “z” are instead “s” (realised instead of realized), and some words use a “c” instead of “s” (defence and defense).

British speakers can feel free to correct me if I’m wrong.

 
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I thought so thanks for very-fying that for me-uh

 
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I find myself using defense and defence interchangeably all the time I MUST BE BRITISH TO!!! neat!

 
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why do people use U in the word color….

Though many had done so before, Noah Webster (of Webster’s dictionary) is credited with taking out the U’s. He was trying to simplify spellings by getting rid of what he thought as unneeded letters.

You should see some of the simplifications of spelling that Benjamin Franklin advocated; he dropped about half of all the letters.

 
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It’s seriously spelled ‘realized’ in America? That looks wierd o.O