Since poetry is technically art, this is in the right place. Some of my poems will be pretty long, and pretty ramble-y. Get used to it. I am aware that the rhythm changes from the beginning to the end of many of my poems. However, it is my inability to keep rhythm that makes my poems unique. I hope you guys will post comments about my poems, but try to keep the criticism constructive. Also, I’d like to hear some of your poems as well.
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In Another Dimension In another dimension, In another dimension, Nothing at all, |
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In the little gray box to the left side of your post, you will notice the “Edit button”, normally, used to edit…your posts…. And, well I look forward to seeing poems :] |
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I look forward to seeing your poems. I’d suggest keeping your thread organized, try not to double post, and give your thread a more specific title (POPPY’s Poetry or something). Also, we have a group, called Writer’s Block here dedicated to language arts. You can feel free to post there if you want. |
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I know this it nitpicky, but I get very distracted by you writing “demension” rather than “dimension” I look forward to seeing more. |
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Ozzy123 is pleased by these poems. =P |
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Warning, cheesy words follow Lol I tried writing a song (lyrics = poetry) after I had a great day and was feeling great about life. DONT JUDGE MEH Now I’m Free A sense of relief. |
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As far as I can see, that was pretty good. However, I would imagine there is little respect for higher English here, as the mean age is about 14, and many of them are being forcefed the most dreary poetry and Shakespeare. Some say Shakespeare was the best thing to happen to English, but I think he was the worst, as many a thirst for novels have been quenched with the sheer dullness of his plays. Had Shakespeare and the like been removed from curriculums worldwide, the thought that English is a boring subject would vanish, along with the travesty that is Old English. If this sort of thing were taught in schools, people would be able to relate, and likely enjoy the language in itself. |
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Inspiration Thank you world for the inspiration, Wrote this for English, 10 poems in one month O_O i like it =D And I hate Shakespeare as well… |
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Originally posted by JohannasGarden: I have a few spelling issues. Thanks for telling me. I fixed it. |
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I Wonder When I wonder when I wonder when I wonder when I wonder when I wonder when I wonder when I wonder… I wonder when |
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Oh, whoops, i didn’t know this was gunna be your thread only, my bad… I just saw Jedi’s poem and went w/ it O_O Also, I like the poem, it kinda groups everything people talk about, but don’t do anything about, into a single poem. |
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Good Morning Mr. Stevens The thunder of bells I see others in the hall Forgetting my duties Smoke sputters out from My nose is screaming A sheet of black Thump tha Thump tha Thump tha Thump tha Thump Darkness |
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Originally posted by ozzy123:No, it’s not only mine. That name just sounds cooler than Poetry. And it’s all I could think of. |
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Originally posted by ozzy123: You know, I made that up on the spot. I felt like writing a poem and it really turned out well. Some of mine are like that, but most of the ‘on-the-spot’ ones are crap. |
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MainFrame: Cool poem Poppy: I see… =P Ny1 like my poem at all(?) |
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Originally posted by ozzy123: Thanks, |
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:D |
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Immature Love, Mature Love Immature love Immature love |
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Ye’ poem speak-ith the truth… =P |
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Originally posted by ozzy123: Thanks :D I like it when I get comments like this. I have plenty of poems that are just plain crap in a notebook somewhere, but I’m getting better at writing. |
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Yah, alot of art doesn’t get commented on, so i always at the least try to say I like or dislike something… that way you don’t feel like it was a waste of time =P |
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Most of the time, posting in Art forums is a waste of time. Kids and teens don’t usually go willingly to these types of forums. Which is one of the many things that makes me and unusual teen. |
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=O I am not wasting my time here… so thats dead wrong… |
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She’s a rainbow and she loves the peaceful life, There’s a part of me in the chaos that’s quiet, That’s part of I’ll Go Crazy if I Don’t Go Crazy Tonight, by U2. Lovethat song. |
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