Am I a good writer :D page 2

All too many grammar mistakes screaming at me (one extremely annoying one is constantly having present tense-words in.). Oh, and a kid walks into high school, and just then a kid pins him by his locker. Then a seemingly popular/pretty girl tries to defend him, and the jock dudes insult the popular seeming girl. Then the next month, without any explanation of cody and priscilla’s conversations, priscilla asks out cody. Also, in chapter eight, a “higher voice” springs out of nowhere. Also, in chapter nine, the man acts like he doesn’t care if cody doesn’t know who he is. If so, then the man probably would’ve realized cody didn’t know anything about the situation and at least say what it was he wanted from Cody. Also, cody doesn’t share what happened with priscilla, despite the fact that this weirdo lucien guy knows about it.

Originally posted by fatcom4:

All too many grammar mistakes screaming at me (one extremely annoying one is constantly having present tense-words in.). Oh, and a kid walks into high school, and just then a kid pins him by his locker. Then a seemingly popular/pretty girl tries to defend him, and the jock dudes insult the popular seeming girl. Then the next month, without any explanation of cody and priscilla’s conversations, priscilla asks out cody. Also, in chapter eight, a “higher voice” springs out of nowhere. Also, in chapter nine, the man acts like he doesn’t care if cody doesn’t know who he is. If so, then the man probably would’ve realized cody didn’t know anything about the situation and at least say what it was he wanted from Cody. Also, cody doesn’t share what happened with priscilla, despite the fact that this weirdo lucien guy knows about it.

^^ Pretty true.
Don’t bother giving such a review though. Look on page 1 – He barely answers you.