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In short, I have not made art in forever and a half now(Lack of motivation mostly), but I would like critique on some of my art to know where to head to, while my motivation/inspiration come back and I am in the mood of making some more.

First off; I would not mind, and quite rather enjoy that people be as rash as need be, pointing out ANY AND ALL flaws that you find; Nothing will be taken personally, I would appreciate to learn the most possible and get “pushed around” a little than live in a field of pansies and not learn at all.

Secondly; Here goes!

EDIT: Some of the darker lines are messed up ((the bottom part mostly; The bee’s singer for example)), as this is a picture and not a scan.

 
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After you scan the image, adjust the levels so the paper is almost white. That will help the whole image pop.

There are things I like about your bee-umberhulk, and things I don’t.

I don’t care for the fact that you gave his wings thick, black outlines. Why? Also, take a look at a bee’s wings, (google images). You’ll see that they have veins and interesting patterns in them. Your little critter’s wings sort of hold the whole thing down. (And why outline the wings without outlining anything else, except the eyes?)

My favorite part is how you handed the lighting on the thorax. It feels like a nice, round donut. It’s believable. In fact, your light source is more or less consistent.

You might consider looking at throwing in some reflected light in the shadow side of his body. This will help give it depth. (Some people call this “edge lighting” but I think that term isn’t really accurate.)

The sharpness and transparency of your reflections will suggest the form’s texture. His body might be soft and fuzzy, so the reflection is diffused. His head, by contrast, might be a hard carapace… so the reflection would be sharp and opaque (white).

Overall, I’d recommend that you use photo reference. Yes, those are teeth… but shark teeth are cooler. (Do you know what shark teeth look like?) Yes, those are mandibles, but stag beetle mandibles are cooler. Nice arms on this guy, but grasshopper legs are cooler. Stinger? Look at a scorpion. Wings? Look at a dragonfly. Eyes? Look at a jumping spider. (Also, insects have 6 legs. Spiders have 8.)

It’s a good start. Keep drawing.

 
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Overall, I’d recommend that you use photo reference. Yes, those are teeth… but shark teeth are cooler. (Do you know what shark teeth look like?) Yes, those are mandibles, but stag beetle mandibles are cooler. Nice arms on this guy, but grasshopper legs are cooler. Stinger? Look at a scorpion. Wings? Look at a dragonfly. Eyes? Look at a jumping spider. (Also, insects have 6 legs. Spiders have 8.)

Well… pretty much this sums up my thoughts

If you’re really looking for straight opinions, let me say that your bee monster is looking like a mutated gyrostat due straight drawing lines in lower body. It also looks metallic due… well, straight lines and that shine you created by shading. And that stinger looks like lifeless and about to vanish

Wings looks like made of net. Needs to be thicker, yet remain it’s transparency levels. Outlining is not really necessary
Second lower part of the body (thorax) vaguely reminds me of life-buoy with way too short spider legs attached into it

Maybe serrated teeth are not the best option… otherwise, well drawn
The fangs… they’re well drawn but I think they should be aligned at the ends of “lips”. And where are the cheeks? They’re not prominent enough. Structure of a head is remind me of pacman

Oh, and as said, spider eyes would fit better

Point of conclusion: You have a great talent in drawing but the overall structure and texture of your mutated-bee-abomination is just way too abstract to handle. It needs to be more authentic, even for a abstract creature

 
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I’ll find myself some line art to shade in ,for texture practice, I havem y eye on one that seems rather complex, gonna try that and see what comes out of it!

Thanks to both of you for the feedback, really appreciated!
Now that i look at it, dang are you right, that stinger part of the body really looks flat, need some fur on there… gonna have to work on that then!

 
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Nice work jerimo, very creative character design.

I think you have already gotten some excellent feedback. If this was CSI:Kongregate, I would think the forensics specialist would say you started with a very cool bug-like head, and decided to add a body to it. There’s nothing wrong with that, but I think a lot of the style, form, and flow isn’t as evident throughout the rest of the character.

It reminds me of one of Sid’s toys in Toy Story. The head has a tough and 3 dimensional look to it, but it is placed on wings and a body recognizable as being an insect, but probably not this head. This could work, but the wings and body feel 2 dimensional and only draw more attention to the head. You can tell that some time was spent on the design of the wings and body design.

One things that may help a lot is human figure drawing, or imagining what this creature’s skeleton would look like. I can imagine a skull, shoulder blades, and some wings and arms attached. The rest is pretty vague. Show some movement in 3 dimension. I think if you try to draw some human figures, you will see. The arms and wings should add more to the figure, not as much or less than the stripes on the body.

You might also consider drawing the head a few more times and seeing if that doesn’t lead you naturally towards designing a body. You might also not make it so dark, and that may lead you to taking some of the heavy coloring in the body and wing outlines.

Nice work, next time post the sickle drawing :P. Thanks for sharing your art jerimo.

 
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Great post, i just want to say thanks for sharing the post, ‘monster bee’ sketch is looking so different, you have to use unique subject for sketching. very nice creativity keep it up.

 
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Haven’t been able to draw in a while, was working alot, and now well I don’t have access to refs for anything, so if I do it will be pure sketching, but anywho; A poem I wrote for a friend who suffers from Anorexia Nervosa, to remind her that in the end beauty is still there, even she can not see it in herself:

Dawning Twilight

Perfection arose,
From dawning twilight stars.
As but your heart’s prose:
withheld behind locked bars,
dearest closeness, morrow’s love
Entrusted, flew as but a dove.

Beheld, in fiendish grip;
Free, flowed one soul’s trip.
Unfaltered reality,
truth be released;
Perfect forms of trinity,
held fast in shape creased.

Body: Unbeknownst beauty
Mind: held shut, til unbind.
Soul: Together held foul.
Perfection: Your desired perverted reflection.

Forward momentum unbound,
still unscathed has touched,
the new beauty found;
For knowledge clutched,
’till unwound creation
of perfection domination.

Aforelived moments;
Withheld stupored events,
of faulting disagree,
traced unlit of you.
Sighted disability,
wellness betrued.

Body: Unsurmountable beauty.
Mind: Opened once found.
Soul: Fast, protected full.
Perfection: True formed attained reflection.

 
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Inspiring… I had a girlfriend with the same disorder. So yeah, I know what that’s like.
I really see something in this poem.
Nice work, I suppose (even though I know little about poetry)

 
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Originally posted by HolyQuacamole:

Inspiring… I had a girlfriend with the same disorder. So yeah, I know what that’s like.
I really see something in this poem.
Nice work, I suppose (even though I know little about poetry)

The point of poetry is not to be appreciated only by a niche group, I’m glad that someone who “know[’s] little about poetry” can also enjoy it!

 
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I think the big problem here is that black outline on the wings. other then that I think it great

also the mandibles, the left one is a bit off

pete just about covered everything

 
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The head is creative and I like how you shaded it. I’ll have to agree with the others on the wings though. The crosshatch pattern killed it for me a little ^^;

 
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here is an example of what pete was saying bee’s wings have patterns and veins and the bone goes through the top not all the way around, like a helicopter seed

and a heli seed

I would suggest you look at pictures of stuff if you don’t know what it looks like

 
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I had wanted to look up a ref for that one but didn’t have access to the internet at the hospital so just finished it as is, but thank you for pulling it out, I might refine it when I get back home and redo the wings on the original!

 
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I probably would have made the same wings ahaha I dont use photo’s alot

 
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I normally don’t either, cause I have some kind of idea how to do it, if not then I normal change part but everything was done when I realized that it needed wings and I had to clue how those are made; so I just botched it in under 5 minutes.. it was tie to go eat

 
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I’de love to see it with the new wings