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Hate, A Poem By `Totality

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Hate – An Original Poem By `Totality.

You let me go,
but took off before I could come back
you put me up to your own show
and now I’m about to crack

You turned my bones to ash,
and split my heart in two,
and now I’m going to crash,
and you can’t deny this is true

For what did you expect me to say?
I don’t hate you I only wish for an explanation,
I only keep these thoughts at bay,
I hate you for not telling me about your violation

You told me you loved me,
than spit on the ground I tread,
and now you will see,
about these things that I said

I will care, always, but you did this,
It didn’t have to end this way,
but no matter in the end it was hit and miss,
and I only wish there was more to say

I’m a little rusty, so don’t be too harsh ;D
EDIT:Ye, this isn’t personal experience, i know I’m too young to understand love, this is more about a battle inside of someone who is fighting their loss of innocence. Plus this just came out of my brain.
EDIT2:Kong’s got some pretty talented poets! :D
EDIT3:This isn’t about love, it’s about a different experience in life that’s painful, Poems are a way of conveying how I feel sometimes.

 
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I would like to respond
To your two poems in verse
You’re dropping heavy ideas, man
Are you under a curse?

You say you’re too young
To know about heartache
Seems like you nailed
On pretty much the first take

Part of love, in my view,
is taking a chance
(The other part, of course,
involves taking off your pants)

It starts off so fun
like a great two-player game
And no love ends pretty
It’s always completely lame

Few people recall
that for both parties involved
Feelings of guilt and hurt
are left unresolved

So, I like your poems
but they seem a touch simple
I’m sure you’ll get better
after you’ve had your first pimple

(Nice work, actually… seriously)

 
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A-B-A-B is too mainstream for me
I prefer the structure of A-A-B-B
I can’t even write poems but I wanted to say
You can’t comprehend love after living a day

Your innate emotions seek some sort of sensation
An inevitable crawl through burning deprivation
Then you find what you seek, momentary elation
But alas, it only lasts for a short duration

Ensnared by beauty, not by the heart
A very unfortunate place to start
True love but bereft, or perhaps never there
It’s about creating one whole, not being a pair

You are not one entity, but rather one half
So shake off your defeat with a simple laugh
You’ve learned one thing – what you searched for was wrong
Completing yourself is what you needed all along

Life is yours to control, don’t throw your heart away
Finding your other half is the only true way
To fulfill your desires and live happily
True love will outlast even eternity

 
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Damn, that’s not too bad
for a guy called “Sup Homies”
He’s got some good points
When it comes to loves and poetries.

 
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Originally posted by SupHomies:

A-B-A-B is too mainstream for me
I prefer the structure of A-A-B-B
I can’t even write poems but I wanted to say
You can’t comprehend love after living a day

Your innate emotions seek some sort of sensation
An inevitable crawl through burning deprivation
Then you find what you seek, momentary elation
But alas, it only lasts for a short duration

Ensnared by beauty, not by the heart
A very unfortunate place to start
True love but bereft, or perhaps never there
It’s about creating one whole, not being a pair

You are not one entity, but rather one half
So shake off your defeat with a simple laugh
You’ve learned one thing – what you searched for was wrong
Completing yourself is what you needed all along

Life is yours to control, don’t throw your heart away
Finding your other half is the only true way
To fulfill your desires and live happily
True love will outlast even eternity

Inside me true love awoke,
but then it ended and something inside broke,
I’d hate to say I’ve lived a day,
but my tolerance has gone away

For one life to live it was hard to understand,
when after it happened no one lent a hand,
for one thing to happen to me,
and for no one else to see,

I’d like to say
My pain is gone away,
but no one told me I could break so fast,
and it’s impossible to ever forget the past

I used to help so many friends,
but now I just can’t make amends,
no one ever understands who I used to be,
but one branch turned into a tree

So thank you for your advice,
But you must understand I payed my price
But I’m in my shell of my past self,
I can’t be dusted and pulled off the shelf.