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[competition] Writer's Block Competition (Ended)

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3 Marh
3 Ukos
1 TH322
4 rawismojo
1 JudeMaverick


Enough with these art competitions! Instead of how handy we are with an image editor, let’s see how well we can grasp language, and its intricate rules.

As such, let’s have a little writing contest. Just a a simple epigram. What’s an epigram you say?

Samuel Taylor Coleridge said it nicely:

What is an Epigram? A dwarfish whole;
Its body brevity, and wit its soul.

Or if you need the Wikipedia version – http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Epigram

It can be about anything, so go on, and write!

(Btw, you don’t have to just stay with just the English epigram, you can do the other types as well [ie. Roman].)

Now, there are some rules.


1.This is still Kong, adhere to the Kong rules.
2.Don’t steal other’s work. Have a good defense if the authencity is challenged.
3. Submit only one piece. Cross that out, since these are short, you can submit more, however, keep them all within your original post.
4.Don’t vote yourself.
5.Provide some critique on at least the piece you voted for. However, you don’t have to limit yourself, you can critique as many pieces as you want.
6.Have fun!

Voting will take place at the end of a week’s time, on April 29th. You can critique before then, but only vote on April 29th.

(Btw pt. 2, keep it all within this thread, your pieces, critiques, and voting. I’ll link to each piece in the below post.)

P.S. Remember guys, you can make them longer, just keep them in couplets.

An example is this one by Robert Herrick:

I saw a Flie within a Beade
Of Amber cleanly buried:

The Urne was little, but the room
More rich than Cleopatra’s Tombe.

 
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Entries


Razziel’s
SaintAjora’s
Zarden’s
yuyuter’s
DeadSoulReaper’s
Ukos
googoolyeye’s
TTrashCAN’s
rawismojo’s
Oboe_Passion’s
Laxaria’s
Marh’s
TH322’s
JudeMaverick’s
Yllier’s
InwardNose’s
Kapricon’s
Charler94’s
landfieldjc’s

 
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Playing games on Kong,
is better than smoking a bong.

So won’t you have me for this dance
so we could make a merry prance.

Of what knows the elder?
The power of laughter.

Looking into the mirror reveals naught;
but what you are and what you got.

 
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Time for another quickie;
he’s updating a wiki.

 
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I’m here trying to find me,
The one thing I’ll never be.

 
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Where is the light;
I can’t find it without my sight…

New one…
For some reason I see these words;
I look and wonder, “Might I get third?”…

 
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A competition! I’ll enter this.
And the loser gets a kick in the

 
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Embers and ashes,
The dregs of their lashes.

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If time flies when we have fun,
Then fun kills us, every one.

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Held in arms of loved ones near,
How easy ’tis to conquer fear.

 
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To be, or not to be?
The question is, is it really me?

Meh, I suck at epigrams. There should be a sonnet competition! :D

 
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Does your person have ‘M’ in his name?
And just like that, you’ve won the game!

(The guess who game)

 
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Epigrams? Pshah! We want haiku!
This contest is rigged, let’s start a coup.

 
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False visions! The devils sin.
A thread we spin until we can not tell where lie ends and truth begins.

 
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How many Kong members to change that bulb?
Make it a badge, and we’ll see a bulge!

 
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I guess I will do a few critiques, since no one else is taking it up.

Originally posted by yuyuter:

Where is the light;
I can’t find it without my sight…

This one seems a bit obvious. Not a bad thing, but certainly not very innovative.

Originally posted by rawismojo:

Epigrams? Pshah! We want haiku!
This contest is rigged, let’s start a coup.

I like this one. My only complaint would be ‘Pshah’…it isn’t necessarily a common sound so it does seem to cause an extended break.

 
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A battle without victory,
Makes up all of history.

I’ll try to edit some more in later. :3

 
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A general critique for a few of them: Epigraphs are poems. And, as poems, the must have both rhyme (if you have a rhyming poem, as we do here) and meter. Most people are focusing on the rhyme without any real care for the meter. Make sure both lines makes sense metrically when spoken outloud. If you have to rush the second line or add pauses that aren’t there to make them sound poetic, you could probably stand to edit them a bit.

EDIT: Upon review of my own post, I’ve concluded that this is the point where I assert myself as a douchecanoe. Sorry.

 
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Originally posted by Marh:

A battle without victory,

Makes up all of history.

I love this one! :D

 
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Tomorrow shall be
Filled with sorrow

 
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This one seems a bit obvious. Not a bad thing, but certainly not very innovative.

Yes, probably not innovative…
Thank you for being commentative XD
Not a word…

 
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If time flies when we have fun,
Then fun kills us, every one.

Nice one! This one’s awesome. =D

 
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Originally posted by Ukos:

Embers and ashes,

The dregs of their lashes.

Here’s a grim one:

If time flies when we have fun,

Then fun kills us, every one.

Loved them both. Though the second was a bit to obvious to fully get the grim vibe. ;)

 
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I’m just like a child;
I ask smart questions to clever people like Former US President George Bush.

I fear of nothing and everything
but I do not fear of myself.

 
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Clashes, clashes, the king lost his crown,
Ashes, ashes, we all fall down

 
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Fred ate a pie,
Eating a pie made Fred die.

 
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Ten hardcore gamers playing online;
One didn’t sign out and then there were nine.

If you don’t understand, let’s just say… Agatha Christie.

Ten little Soldier boys went out to dine;
One choked his little self and then there were nine.

Nine little Soldier boys sat up very late;
One overslept himself and then there were eight.

Eight little Soldier boys traveling in Devon;
One said he’d stay there and then there were seven.

Seven little Soldier boys chopping up sticks;
One chopped himself in halves and then there were six.

Six little Soldier boys playing with a hive;
A bumblebee stung one and then there were five.

Five little Soldier boys going in for law;
One got into Chancery and then there were four.

Four little Soldier boys going out to sea;
A red herring swallowed one and then there were three.

Three little Soldier boys walking in the zoo;
A big bear hugged one and then there were two.

Two Little Soldier boys sitting in the sun;
One got frizzled up and then there was one.

One little Soldier boy left all alone;
He went out and hanged himself and then there were none.