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Storyteller Idol (ROUND 1- FREE WRITE)
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Oscar and Alphonse
I dozed off from my daily chores picking weeds out of my dad’s garden. I stared into the dark leaves that surround my house. I noticed something shiny on one leaf. I came closer. The slightest wisp of a sound pounded my head. I screamed.
“What ?! What?!” My dad screamed. “Um nothing, I thought I heard something.” “Foolish Girl! Get back to work!” My dad said in an angry voice. I have always hated my dad. He married my mother, Mary, in an arranged marriage. She named me Rose and died a few months after I was born. Tears started gushing down my eyes. The very thought of my mother sent me into tears.
I quickly filled the bucket full of the small, delicious berries that grew on the ivy that climbed the trees. I was done early today but I had nothing to do after my chores. After my mother died, I had nobody to talk to, I was all alone in this world.
I had always mourned for companionship except my Dad, Dish. I have decided to go to a misty spring near my house. The water there sparkled like diamonds dipped in sunlight. The refreshing breeze always calmed my nerves. Me and my mother always used to go here. No, I had to stop. I couldn’t think about anyone I love, or … loved. I began to wonder why the sun got engulfed by a steady shadow. I think it was one of those solar eclipse things. As I started to walk back to my house another voice ringed into my head.
“Come closer…” it said in a soft voice. Then I saw the same shiny silver object on a leaf that kissed the water. I leaned closer onto the leaf. It was a silver thread of sticky silk. On the leaf there were two small orbs. They were caterpillar eggs. One was dark while the other was white. I took them home in hope they would hatch.
I walked home holding them in my warm scarf, unaware that I was late for dinner. As I opened the creaky door in my house, a cold chill ran up my spine. My Dad was waiting for me. Instead of slapping me across the head for being late for dinner, he said in a calm tone:
“You should come home earlier next time.”
I was surprised.
After dinner I remembered the eggs and I ran to my bed, turned off the lights and held them snugly in my cotton shirt. As the morning dew froze into frost, I woke up. My dad had left the house, probably drunk in some old tavern or casino. He never was good at handling money. The eggs basked in the bright light by my window. Instead of the normal back pain I get from sleeping on my hard bed, I felt new and full of energy in the morning. I began talking to them like they were my mother.
I forgot all about my chores. Luckily I finished at dusk, right before dad got home.
“Did you finish your chores?” He asked in a brisk tone.
“Yes,” I replied. Using the berries I collected, I managed to bake a small berry pie for dinner. It tasted rather sweet. After dinner I went to back sleep. I had a dream that I was running through a field of flowers with my mother. I woke up crying.
I began to get dressed. My dad came in and told me to go to the market because we were running out of wine. He handed me a few coins to my surprise. I carried the two caterpillars with me, hidden in a small pouch along with my money. I shook the bag, making the metal coins rattle. Making sure I haven’t lost any, I counted them. Not enough. Dad would get angry if I didn’t bring home what he required. I looked around the small town. Down an alley there were some dirty folks, gambling with an old pair of dice. Mother always told me to stay away from these people. Curiosity pursued.
I can’t believe it I won! Now I have even more money than what I needed! I bought a good dress with my money. I wore it on the way home. It was a turquoise blue with yellow stripes.
As I opened the creaky door to my house, my dad was waiting there for me. I was surprised.
“Where in the world did you get that dress?” He said. “I bought it with the money I made." I replied. A hard slap lashed my face.
“Get to bed!” He yelled.
Two nights passed before my face healed. The eggs hatched. It was 2 caterpillars, one covered in dusky gray hairs, while the other was a shining white color. I gazed into them. I made the connection; they were the cause of all these good events. I was curious how they made those things happen. I named the dark one Oscar, and the other Alphonse.
I looked up at my broken window. The sun glowed a light yellow. My stomach was desperate for food and complained often. My dad was out today so I went out to town to see what I could eat.
The crisp delicious smell of bread filled my nose. Now I didn’t just want food, I was compelled to have it. Before dad left, he didn’t leave any money for dinner. I reckoned that the caterpillars would be hungry too so I gathered some leaves to feed them.
There was a warm sensation in where the caterpillars squiggled. When I gathered some more leaves, I saw a gold coin near some rocks.
Not enough. Yet I thanked the caterpillars for trying to get me something to eat. There’s no way anybody could afford to lose a coin in these times. I went back home keeping the coin in my loose pocket. Oscar kept wiggling in an unusual way. As I went home and opened the door, I tripped on a rock. My coin rolled out.
“Now where you get some more money?” Dad asked suspiciously. He kept his gaze on the shiny gold coin.
“It’s well-” I stuttered. My dad saw right through my lie. “Wait! I can explain! It’s these caterpillars!” I hold out my hand to show him the caterpillars. “They caused me a string of good fortune!” He immediately lunged at me but tripped on the same rock I tripped on. “Give me them!” he yelled. “No!” I screamed back at him. “They’re my friends!”
“We could get riches, and live in a nice house; I’ll even buy all the dolls you want…” He said in a sly voice. I didn’t trust him at all. I immediately ran as soon as he gave chase to me. He was much faster then me, but I somehow managed to out speed him. Alphonse wiggled fiercely in my hand. I ignored her. I went all the way up to a small cliff face. I was pretty sure I lost him, but he scared me when he jumped out, seemingly out of nowhere.
“You have nowhere else to go Rose.” He taunted. I looked down at the river about seven stories down. Nowhere else to go I thought.
Then, the same voice pounded in my head.
It said “Jump”.
For a moment I hesitated, but then, before I could think, I jumped the cliff. I don’t know what came over me. When I landed in the river, the force was like concrete. The currents carried me down the river, with me paralyzed and unable to swim free. I floated down to a foggy little pond. I figured out that this was the same pond my mother used to visit whenever she needed to get away from Dad. Oscar and Alphonse moved but I knew I was not going to survive.
I knew it was time to send them back. They softly wiggled in my hands, spelling out good bye. They squirmed off in a hurry to find another child desperate of a companion. I got what I wanted, Friends.
At least I’ll be with my mother again.